2021年5月8日托福独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are younger rather than when you are older.
【Introduction】
There are certain things that should be done when we are younger rather than when we are older. Visiting the overseas is one of such things.
【本段解读】
开头段落真的不需要啰里八嗦。相反，应该直截了当，三言两语迅速进入正题。
【Body Para.1】
We certainly will lose the open-mindedness and will no longer be malleable when we reach an older age. At that age, visiting other countries in the world would not help developing our worldview—in terms of which youth governs maturity in the case of most people—and instead would only be expensive leisure and perhaps bring only vacant happiness. This is the case of my father, who always enjoys the journeys and who does not seem to grow a bit with the delight and excitement. Or the meaning of it may be so little that we may even regret spending the time, energy and money. This is the case of my mother, who visited Australia and kept complaining how uneconomical the travel was as she did not feel getting anything. And the trip to Europe was the last straw that kills her interest in traveling abroad.
【本段解读】
* 本段的内容：论证为何不选“when we are older”。
* 写作方法的重点在于高亮的部分作为例子是穿插在段落中的，而不是僵硬地把例子堆在一起写在段落的最后。
【Body Para.2】
The above represents my pragmatic view indeed, the view that expects substantial returns of global traveling, yet this is not wrong. If we are to spend a considerable sum of money—traveling abroad is after all costly, we certainly should want some rewards that would help our life. If we are in substantial agreement over this view, we should agree that younger people can get the maximum benefit from traveling to the overseas. They see the world and grow.
接下来是大家都熟悉的“陈词滥调”：年轻人从游历外国中获得见识和成长。这一部分老师不示范了，不稀奇，大家都这么写，大家也都会写。只要注意强调这些收获仅限于年轻人、是年轻人的专利就可以了。另外，别忘记举例。
【本段解读】
* 本段的内容：论证为何选“when we are younger”的核心理由。
* 写作方法是常规方法。
【Body Para.3】
There are other reasons why the earlier we make the journeys the better. First, traveling abroad is a major “manual labor”, and younger people have better strength and energy so that they can see as many places as possible, whereas older people, whose energy level is lower, may feel tired too soon and thus cannot enjoy themselves to the full. Second, better than traveling in a tour group—older people’s way, traveling with friends and being spontaneous—younger people’s way is more exciting and has more fun. In addition, language barrier is never a problem for younger tourists even though they barely speak a word of the local language because it is not awkward for them to use “sign language”—they may even have fun gesticulating at the local people. It would however be a problem for older travelers since the lack of language would make them uncomfortable or even embarrassed.
【本段解读】
* 本段的内容：补充说明为何选“when we are younger”，三个小理由合并在一个段落里简单陈述。
* 写作时注意：由于本段有三个补充理由，所以每个理由不要赘述，三言两语点到即可。
【Conclusion】
It is certainly inadvisable that we do not travel abroad until someday when we are older. Instead, we should seize the youth and do it now.
【本段解读】
结尾段落真的同样也不需要啰里八嗦，而应该直截了当，简单两句完成任务就好。
