2016年9月24日雅思大作文题目
City dwellers seldom socialize with their neighbors today and the sense of community has been lost. Why has this happened and how to solve this problem?
解析
小时候有一段时间住在农村，夏天天热的时候，晚上全村的人都搬出凉床在村口的空地上乘凉。记得那时每天晚上仰望清亮无比的星空，听大人们讲银河的故事，看见一颗流星划过天际就齐声发出惊呼。如今，这段动人心弦的时光过去了，永远地进入到我个人的历史长河中了。我现居广州，一个飞车党曾经十分流行的城市，一个很少看见蓝天白云的城市。我读的南方都市报，每天都少不了烧杀抢掠，每天都少不了坑蒙拐骗。我住在20层高楼已经5年，左邻右舍姓甚名谁，一概不知。楼上楼下都在干什么，全不知晓。我每天去办公室，教课，然后回到自己感觉最安全的蜗居，打开网络，在网上恣意纵横，国事家事天下事，事事关心。
到底从什么时候起，我开始不再与邻里交往？到底从什么时候起，我开始不再愿意加入一个群体？9月24日的雅思大作文给了一个机会让我思考。原因当然是多方面多层次的，在短短的250字内不可能谈完谈深。我在想，也许是我受到了媒体的影响，认为邻居可能不是好人，可能会抢我，甚至害我；也许是家里的网络给了我太多归属感，让我沉醉在虚拟世界里。我知道，远离邻里，远离社区，害怕甚至拒绝与真人打交道，这是常见的一种现代人疾病。我决定，从今天写完这篇作文开始，每天抽出1-2小时，不带手机，不带ipad，也不带电脑，去与邻居交流，去加入社区活动；我决定，不再读，不再信，也不再传那些鸡鸣狗盗的媒体新闻，敞开心扉，将心比心，去交几个真正的朋友！
7分范文
Now we have numerous newspaper reports about a child being robbed without anybody offering to help him or a ninety-year-old poor woman dead at home for days without anybody knowing it. All these reports point to one key problem that face dwellers in cities, especially big cities: they seldom interact with their neighbors, much less to say they care about their neighbors and they feel lonely because they do not feel they belong to any community.
When asked why they do not socialize with their neighbors, many people would respond by saying “Why should I? This is a dangerous city!” Indeed, modern media such as TV, newspaper and Internet have had way too much coverage about the city’s crimes like theft, robbery and murder. People constantly exposed to such reports of the dark side of the city life may harbor the idea that nobody is trustworthy, including their neighbors.
On the other hand, people now do not feel any more the necessity to communicate with their neighbors or become part of a community. Anyway, they do not need their neighbors like they did before. They work, earn enough money and go back home to relax themselves. When they want to talk, they can just pick up their cellphone and talk to anybody in the world; when they have some brilliant ideas they want to share, they can get online with a few simple clicks and then post their ideas there.
But we all know that confinement to oneself is no good, no matter how many friends or fans you may have online. As part of the solution to the problem, I would suggest everybody have an “Internet-free moment”. Simply put, we can set aside an hour every day, in which we try to reach out for our neighbors without a cellphone or laptop with us. Once we begin to care about real people around us, we will suddenly find ourselves living in a community that also cares about us. This experience is much more rewarding than having thousands of virtual friends who do not really know us. At the same time, all media should be fully aware of their share of responsibility in this problem, and try to bring more positive stories about the city life.
老师笔记
Now we have numerous newspaper reports about a child being robbed without anybody offering to help him or a ninety-year-old poor woman dead at home for days without anybody knowing it. All these reports point to one key problem that face dwellers in cities, especially big cities: they seldom interact with their neighbors, much less to say they care about their neighbors and they feel lonely because they do not feel they belong to any community.
(1) 本段提出现象：城市居民互不来往，互不关心，时时感到孤独。
(2) 经常阅读本专栏的烤鸭可能已经发现，唐老师在这里采取了一种完全不同的作文开头模式：用举例方式来引出话题。这种方式其实是英语作文很常见的一种方式，但由于它难以融入国内雅思写作培训的所谓模板，因此很多培训老师都故意避而不讲。希望阅读本专栏的烤鸭认真阅读，用心模仿。唐老师的范文力求规避模板，教会大家正确的英语写作方式，避免走入歧途。各位烤鸭阅读模仿唐老师的范文，一旦学会了唐老师的思维和写作方式，不仅会提高雅思考试成绩，更能提高英语写作水平，对将来适应国外学习大有补益。这是其他所谓模板套句写作范文所无法比拟的。（有心的烤鸭可以把唐老师的范文与其它渠道的范文比较一下，欢迎交流！）
(3) numerous 许多（可用来替换many, a lot of）
(4) point to 指向；指明
(5) much less to say 更不必说
When asked why they do not socialize with their neighbors, many people would respond by saying “Why should I? This is a dangerous city!” Indeed, modern media such as TV, newspaper and Internet have had way too much coverage about the city’s crimes like theft, robbery and murder. People constantly exposed to such reports of the dark side of the city life may harbor the idea that nobody is trustworthy, including their neighbors.
(1) 本段写第1个理由，即媒体的影响。开头句也一反模板，相当新颖。如果按照模板写：Firstly, many people do not socialize with their neighbors because they think the city is a dangerous place. 这也完全可以，但就不是高分的节奏了！
(2) respond by saying 的简单说法就是answer。
(3) way too much （表示否定）太多，过多，比如：She has spent way too much money on her dresses./她花了过多的钱在她的裙子上。
(4) People constantly exposed to such reports...may... 长期阅读这类报道的人们会......。简单的表达就是：If people often read such reports, they may... 不过，这个改动就把得分降至6分了。
(5) ...harbor the idea that... 有......的想法。harbor的简单用词是have。
On the other hand, people now do not feel any more the necessity to communicate with their neighbors or become part of a community. Anyway, they do not need their neighbors like they did before. They work, earn enough money and go back home to relax themselves. When they want to talk, they can just pick up their cellphone and talk to anybody in the world; when they have some brilliant ideas they want to share, they can get online with a few simple clicks and then post their ideas there.
(1) 本段写第2个理由，即现代人没有实际需要与邻居交往。主要论述方式是举例：想与人交谈的时候......；想与人交流思想的时候......
(2) necessity n. 必要性
(3) click 这里是名词用法，动词敲键盘就是click the keyboard
But we all know that confinement to oneself is no good, no matter how many friends or fans you may have online. As part of the solution to the problem, I would suggest everybody have an “Internet-free moment”. Simply put, we can set aside an hour every day, in which we try to reach out for our neighbors without a cellphone or laptop with us. Once we begin to care about real people around us, we will suddenly find ourselves living in a community that also cares about us. This experience is much more rewarding than having thousands of virtual friends who do not really know us. At the same time, all media should be fully aware of their share of responsibility in this problem, and try to bring more positive stories about the city life.
(1) 本段写解决办法。主要写如何摆脱网络影响，也提及媒体报道。
(2) confinement to oneself 封闭自我
(3) simply put 简言之
(4) set aside 抽出；留出
(5) rewarding 有回报的
(6) virtual 虚拟的
参考译文
现在有无数的报纸报道，一个孩子被抢劫却无人主动帮助，或者一个可怜的90岁老太太在家里死去数日，却无人知晓。所有这些报道都指向城市（尤其是大城市）居民面临的一个关键问题：他们很少也邻居互动，更不要说关心邻居，他们感觉孤独，因为他们没有团体归属感。
当问及为什么不和邻居交往时，许多人的反应就是“为什么要交往？这个城市很危险！”的确，现代诸多媒体，比如电视，报纸和因特网报道了太多城市里的犯罪，比如偷盗、抢劫、杀人等。长期浸润在这种城市生活负面报道中的人，也许会产生这种想法，即没有人是可信的，包括邻居。
另一方面，人们不再感到必要与邻居交流或者成为团体的一部分了。的确，他们不像以前那样需要邻居了。他们工作，挣足够的钱，然后回家休息。当他们想交谈时，只需拿起手机就可以同世界上任何人通话；当他们有了好观点想交流，只需敲几下键盘，就可以上网发布自己的观点了。
但是我们都知道封闭自我不好，无论你在网上有多少朋友或者粉丝。为了解决这个问题，我提出一个方案，建议每个人都有一个“无网络时刻”。简单地说，我们可以每天都拿出一个小时，在这一小时里，我们走出去与邻居交往，没有电话，没有笔记本电脑。一旦我们开始关心周围的真正的人，我们会突然发现我们居住其中的团体也关心我们。这种经历远比在网上拥有成千上万但并不真正关心我们的网友更有价值。同时，所有新闻媒体也应该充分认识到自己在这个问题中的责任，努力多报道城市生活的积极面。
