支招小作文(68) | 流程图 2:又一制作工序

苏州编辑 2021-11-17 16:55

* 非数据图:【流程图】

* 类型一:【制作工序】

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# Introduction

Shown in the diagram is the procedure of making sugar from sugar cane. The process, seen in an overall view, is quite complex, consisting of multiple steps in which different machines are used. 

* 第·一句话中下划线的部分是倒装现象,此时尤其注意动词的单复数由动词后的名词成分(才是真的主语)的单复数决定。

* 第二句中,动词的分词(句中为被动)作插入状语(表示主句陈述的事情以什么样的方式、条件、原因发生。这一句中,表方式。)第二句,陈述图的宏观情况,拿到内容分的同时拿到语法分(插入状语、伴随状语以及其中的定语从句)

# Body

First, it takes a minimum of 12 months and a maximum of 18 for sugar canes to ripen, and grown canes are harvested by eitherlaborersormachinery. The next step is crushing sugar canes into juice by the crushing machine, and then the juice is purified through the limestone filter. 至此,句子的主句已经多样了。后面还可以更多样: An evaporator is used at the following step, at which the purified juice becomes syrup as it is heated in the evaporator. 用器械/器皿等作为主语是不容易想到的,这个句子的可学性很高。Then, the syrup goes into the centrifuge, which separates sugar crystals from the syrup. 这一句和之前的一句用到了不一样的定语从句,也是丰富了作文中的语法现象,得语法分,请留意。Sugar crystals – the semi-product – need to dry and cool in a bucket and become the end product – sugar. 这一句中注意,dry和cool用的是不及物动词含义。

* 老章自然是要提醒注意高亮标出的词汇。

* 老章的这一段中的语法其实都是简单语法现象,但是句子读起来节奏是丰富的,主要得益于句子主语/开头的多样和丰富。

# Conclusion

In light of those steps, making sugar from sugar cane is a job of complexity, not only because of the many steps but also because of the need to use different pieces of equipment in each step. 这样的结尾段内容有一定的难度,但是可以学会。首先重申一下图的全貌,然后就这个图而言,可以解释一下是因为步骤多,并且每个步骤都有不一样的器械。这个套路是可以学会的,要学。


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