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支招小作文(79) |柱图5:两组柱子仅8个数字

作者: 2022-03-14 15:37 来源:苏州编辑
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* 柱图,选自《剑桥雅思真题集10》

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Shown in the two charts are the 2008 statistics regarding the numbers of UK graduates and postgraduates doing different types of work excluding full-time work. Overall, there are apparent similarities and minor differences between the two groups of graduates.

* 注意开头处的倒装现象。

* 注意词汇:表达程度的形容词apparent和minor。

Voluntary work, chosen by 3,500 graduates and 345 postgraduates, was the least popular choice among both groups. In fact, all graduates would rather be unemployed, and it is particularly the case among postgraduates, as the unemployed numbered 1,625.

* 首先索性把voluntary work这个情况最特殊又单纯的destination用一句话写完拉倒。

* 第·一句话中的动词被动分词引导的状语插入,介绍了数字,又避免了罗列数字那样的“流水账”写法。

* 第二句话是CC文脉的关键,让第·一、二两句话之间形成联系的同时,又在句子内部再次形成递进关系。

* 最后的由as引导的状语从句中number的动词用法,意义为“数目是”。

* 整个段落没有用定语从句也一样可以介绍清楚数值。

Further study is noticeable not only for it had the greatest and overwhelming popularity among graduates – as it was the destination of almost 30,000 graduates – but also for it was onepreference for postgraduates, which was the choice of 2,725 people. The other preferred destination of postgraduates was part-time employment, as there were 2,535 postgraduates who chose it. In addition, when graduates would not choose further study, theyopt for either doing part-time work or being unemployed as two equally preferable choice.

* 由not only … but also … 构建的句子是亮点。

* 主语/句子开头的多样是另一个亮点:每个句子(包括主句和从句)的主语/句子开头各不相同。

* 第·一句的末尾出现了用定语从句介绍数值的语法现象。

* 词汇注意:overwhelming这个表达程度的形容词;与“选择”相关的动词opt for、形容词preferrable、名词preference。

In general, while those four destinations had different popularity in each of two groups, the two groups show similar inclinations for them. 

* 词汇注意:与“选择”相关的名词inclination。


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