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支招小作文(75) | 表格2:同时不同项 横纵双维度

作者: 2022-01-17 15:30 来源:苏州编辑
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类型:表格

写作关键:

* 描述【比较】,存在于【全脂和低脂之间】,也存在于【年龄段之间】。

* 数据加工:找出某种规律作为内容的“底层思路”。本文的思路是:以对于全脂或低脂的偏好作为原则,不同的年龄段之间存在异同。

The table below gives information of the weekly level of consumption by different age groups in ordinary milk and butter, healthy alternative (HA) milk and butter in one European country.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

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# Introduction

In the table is the information of the weekly amounts of two dairy products – milk and butter –consumed by people of different ages in a European country. Overall, the consumption of each product varies evidently from one group to another. 

* 老生常谈之划线部分是倒装现象。注意动词与后面内容的单复数保持一致。

* 在【introduction】时就陈述对于整个表格情况的总述。

* 注意vary这个不及物动词的用法。

# Body

In terms of milk, it is noticeable that the 26-45 group and the oldest group, different from the other two groups, have a clear preference for the low-fat type, which accounts for 70% or 80% of their weekly total consumption. Another feature is that older people drink more milk than younger people. People under the age of 25 drink only 1.2 liters per week – a small amount compared with the consumption of the other groups.

* 这一段写milk。至此可以看出老章的整体思路是先写milk再写butter,这是一个常用的分段思路(当然有别的分段思路,以后展示)。

* 第·一个句子是一个形式主语(it)指代名词性从句(that xxxxx)的句型。

* 第·一个下划线处:【插入的状语】,说明“the 26-45 group and the oldest group”是以“different from the other two groups”的【方式】“have a clear preference for the low-fat type”。

* 第二个句子是一个主系表结构的句型。其中,表语部分为名词性从句。

* 第二个下划线处:破折号引出的同位语,去近一步说明“only 1.2 liters per week”。

* 绿色加粗字体的词/词组是老章精选,值得记忆。

In terms of the consumption of butter, the full-fat type and low-fat type have balanced shares in the two older groups. In the two younger groups, there is a clear inclination to a certain formula. However, full-fat butter is preferred in the youngest group, accounting for 60% of the weekly consumption, and the opposite is the case with the 26-45 group. In addition, the 45-65 group is noteworthy, as its consumption (60 grams) is markedly higher than that of the other groups.

* 这一段写butter。

* 措辞上尤其值得注意的是“the two older groups”和“the two younger groups”这两个说法简化了具体年龄,省去了麻烦。

* 第·一个下划线处:【伴随状语】,说明“full-fat butter is preferred in the youngest group”的具体情况。

* 第二个下划线处:是英语中常见的一种说法,意思是“情况相反”。

* 绿色加粗字体的词/词组是老章精选,值得记忆。

# Conclusion

In general, the two types of each product have different levels of popularity in different groups.

* 结尾段落再换个说法总结一下全文。


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